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Legal Matters: If Facebook seems so informal in the eyes of non-professionals, it has proven to be very advantageous in tracking down legal disputes. Officials from the Pennsylvania State University reported that they have successfully pursued those students who have bombarded in the field during the Ohio State... 顯示更多 Legal Matters: If Facebook seems so informal in the eyes of non-professionals, it has proven to be very advantageous in tracking down legal disputes. Officials from the Pennsylvania State University reported that they have successfully pursued those students who have bombarded in the field during the Ohio State Game way back October of 2005. It is also helpful in police searches for tracking down culprits and students who violate the standards and moral codes of their colleges where they attended. However, a lot of students either in the high school or college level constantly disagree with how the authorities rely on the information given out in Facebook. Social Interaction: When it tackles about communication per se. It can allow it users to track down long lost friends, acquaintances and relatives that they haven't seen for years. Users are able to meet new groups and are able to interact with their likes and dislikes. Through the system's organization of profiles, it allows its user's access to other personal interests that a contact can use. This can also be a perfect gateway for love to bloom in a dating process. Student Connection: Since Facebook is popular with the younger masses due to similar interests and habits, it is also opens a door for connecting student organizations and ideas. Organizations can post on their walls updates regarding upcoming events and gatherings. And even though there is an increase in the accessibility of online communities like Facebook, there are supporters who still insist that the service offer more alternatives in terms of communication modes therefore allowing announcements of different capabilities and functions which will remain dominant.
First, outline some corrections on your origianl writing: Par 1: it has proven to have advantage in tracking down legal disputes [original ok, but this is clean cut] the Ohio State Game way back in October 2005 [always us "in" month + YYYY will be the simpliest form, only very old Birtish English uses "in the MMM of YYYY"] It is also helpful for police searches in tracking down culprits and students who violate the standards and moral codes of their colleges []. [It is slightly long, but complete in cover all the aspects, delete last few words because "their college" must be the colleages they are attending (not attented in the past) so no need to further explain, unless you want to be very specific about finding crimial history of those who attended.] However, a lot of students [] in the high school and college levels [] disagree with the authorities use the information shown in Facebook [You are concluding the paragraph with this sentence, but the original sentence is not complete when you say "how ...rely on..., it gives the impression you'll explain why they disagree about the "how". Modified as a definite concluding comment.] Par 2: When it tackles on effective communication per se It can allow its users to track down long lost friends interact with people similar to their likes and dislikes access to other personal interests that a contact can use [no idea what you mean by "a contact can use"] gateway in blooming the dating process [bloom is a noun, you use it as verb/infinitive] Par3: it [] also opens a door for connecting ["it opens" is the subject-verb] ...[therefore allowing announcements of different capabilities and functions] which will remain dominant. [---] is not correctly formed sturcture within the sentence, but I have trouble understand what it means and what will remain dominant - so suggest the following: ...that conventional communication services may offer modes of functions and capabilities for announcement purpose to be remain dominant. Not bad, but try to avoid complex sentences.
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快 ....英文問題 幫我簡化 用自己既文字講
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Legal Matters: If Facebook seems so informal in the eyes of non-professionals, it has proven to be very advantageous in tracking down legal disputes. Officials from the Pennsylvania State University reported that they have successfully pursued those students who have bombarded in the field during the Ohio State... 顯示更多 Legal Matters: If Facebook seems so informal in the eyes of non-professionals, it has proven to be very advantageous in tracking down legal disputes. Officials from the Pennsylvania State University reported that they have successfully pursued those students who have bombarded in the field during the Ohio State Game way back October of 2005. It is also helpful in police searches for tracking down culprits and students who violate the standards and moral codes of their colleges where they attended. However, a lot of students either in the high school or college level constantly disagree with how the authorities rely on the information given out in Facebook. Social Interaction: When it tackles about communication per se. It can allow it users to track down long lost friends, acquaintances and relatives that they haven't seen for years. Users are able to meet new groups and are able to interact with their likes and dislikes. Through the system's organization of profiles, it allows its user's access to other personal interests that a contact can use. This can also be a perfect gateway for love to bloom in a dating process. Student Connection: Since Facebook is popular with the younger masses due to similar interests and habits, it is also opens a door for connecting student organizations and ideas. Organizations can post on their walls updates regarding upcoming events and gatherings. And even though there is an increase in the accessibility of online communities like Facebook, there are supporters who still insist that the service offer more alternatives in terms of communication modes therefore allowing announcements of different capabilities and functions which will remain dominant.
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最佳解答:First, outline some corrections on your origianl writing: Par 1: it has proven to have advantage in tracking down legal disputes [original ok, but this is clean cut] the Ohio State Game way back in October 2005 [always us "in" month + YYYY will be the simpliest form, only very old Birtish English uses "in the MMM of YYYY"] It is also helpful for police searches in tracking down culprits and students who violate the standards and moral codes of their colleges []. [It is slightly long, but complete in cover all the aspects, delete last few words because "their college" must be the colleages they are attending (not attented in the past) so no need to further explain, unless you want to be very specific about finding crimial history of those who attended.] However, a lot of students [] in the high school and college levels [] disagree with the authorities use the information shown in Facebook [You are concluding the paragraph with this sentence, but the original sentence is not complete when you say "how ...rely on..., it gives the impression you'll explain why they disagree about the "how". Modified as a definite concluding comment.] Par 2: When it tackles on effective communication per se It can allow its users to track down long lost friends interact with people similar to their likes and dislikes access to other personal interests that a contact can use [no idea what you mean by "a contact can use"] gateway in blooming the dating process [bloom is a noun, you use it as verb/infinitive] Par3: it [] also opens a door for connecting ["it opens" is the subject-verb] ...[therefore allowing announcements of different capabilities and functions] which will remain dominant. [---] is not correctly formed sturcture within the sentence, but I have trouble understand what it means and what will remain dominant - so suggest the following: ...that conventional communication services may offer modes of functions and capabilities for announcement purpose to be remain dominant. Not bad, but try to avoid complex sentences.
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